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sneek peak at the NM book
« on: 03/28/03 at 01:48:37 » |
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just so you know i have not done spell check
Have you ever wondered what lies beond this world or most emportantly what lies beond the mist? Dose anyone? Thats the answer, not the question. For one 15 yearold boy named Chris, is about to find what lies beond the mist, or even what lies in the mist, the aftermath, the deaths of the mist.
"Noo pleaze dont kill me"A voice says. " You will dieeeeee" "NOOOO" a voice says Hu Hu Hu it...it was a hu a...dream. God why am I haveing these dreams. Chris is a tall blond hair boy, with a life thats about to change. What do I ware, humm cakies and my FOX over shirt: I think that will do good. Chris runs down stairs and finds something to eat. "ahh I'm late so i wont eat. Bye mom.
" Chris says. Chris sees his friend jen and jhon. "hey wait up. Chris says."
"So whats up Chris" jhon says. "nutin" chris says. " so Jen want that party cool last nig..." Chris Interuptedly says. "woow Look at that mist. Its like swirling." Jen explanes. "um this dosnt look right"
Two huge monsters apear behind them and chase them into the mist inside it looks like a deap and far galexy swerling bright stars planets not seen by man befor. Then a black sphereand only Chris falls in.
Where am I.. Chris says. "Uh" Chris looks around
hes in a dark candel lit room. The walls are made of rock and there is a smell of a dead corpse. A girl walks by hima very hot girl with long blond hair, the cloths arent good but thats not the problem.
How did you get down here" she says
"um i dont know" Chris says."were am I."
Your in NIghtmist City. I am Zephie, the dungen mistris"
"What how did I get here." Chris says.
"well if you must know. Your Dad the one that died 3 years ago never died. He was Sent here for resons we dont know, but now we do. He is to portal opener. That mist you saw was the portal. We brought you here because only you can kill your dad." She explanes
Hes still alive, and now your telling me to kill him." Chris explanes.
"well yes.If you dont are worlds will cross paths""If they do are monsters will inviade your wirld."she said.
Well how do i kill him" Chris says
"first i will tell you the story" she gos on in explanation.
"In the beginning, there was nothing. Nothing roamed the great plains of the North. Nothing inhabited the swamps and mountains of the East. The Deserts of the South was barren of all life.
Than came the mist.
Out of the Night it formed. Swirling and congealing into vague shapes. Never holding solid form for very long. We can only now guess about the origin of the mist. Some say it was the breath of one of the great gods. Or even the creating of Leighton, the high god of all. But whatever the origins, the mist brought life.
Coming out of the great plains of the North, the mist created wolfs, bears, magic creatures, and all sorts of good things. Traveling throughout the lands, it deposited good creatures in its wake. From the North, to the East, travelling South, eventually settling in the West, the mist created.
After it settled in the West, the mist grew, day by day, it grew soon becoming so thick, the animals could no longer walk in and out of it. Than, on the 4th night, a new set of creatures walked forth from the mist. The adventurers of the land had been born. But the mist wasnt done yet. Slowly it allowed itself to form into great buildings, and streets. Finally, the mist was gone, all that remained was a great town, beckoning new travelers and adventurers.
Life prospered in the town, adventurers came, than left. The town was dubbed NightMist by the people, naming it after its origins. As life went on, the people began to spread out. Rangers and Druids foraged ahead into the wilderness, the Knights, Paladins, and Clerics civilizing the land behind it. Soon the towns of Cloud City and Northkeep popped up on the maps. Trade flourished, and the good people were happy for many years.
But not all the people were honest and happy. Along with the expansions of the new communities, the dark underside of the world showed forth. Assassins started killing people on their ways from the towns, and thiefs took gold from traveling merchants. But the people counteracted and posted guards, and soon things fell into a balance. Until one assassin went to far.
Along with good, always comes bad. So is true in medicinal discoveries. Along with healing potions, came poisons. Most were essentially harmless, used just to stun unwary prey so they were easier to rob, but one fellow decided to take things to far. He created a potion tainted with his own evil essence, though, not being powerful enough, and not naturally gifted with magical powers, could do nothing to amplify it. But, in order to try it out, he went and waited in ambush one day. As luck would have it, a powerful druid, Norinth, and his bride to be SilverFyre were walking down the road, and Norinth was wounded from behind by the tainted dagger of the assassin. As he fell to the ground, he called forth the power of lightning to kill the assassin, not realizing the antidote would die with him.
SilverFyre, being the naturally gifted healer she was, tried her hardest to remove the poison, but the taint was so strong, it had soon blended with the heart of the good druid. As he died, a change happened. His skin turned grey, his hair grew wilder, and he arose. No longer a powerful and good druid, but now an undead Druid, with a power seemingly amplified by evil.
Norinth unleashed havoc, killing many people, creating horrors like goblins, and ogres to terrorize the good people. Soon, once good citizens began to defect, turning their lives into evil rampages with only greed and evil itself to keep them going. Many battles were fought between the forces of good and evil. Brother fought Brother, Mother fought Son, Sister fought Father. None were exempted by the all out assault upon the lands.
During one battle, the forces of good were under siege in the city of NorthKeep. The mages had a protective shield placed against the stones, and lightnings from the sky, and the paladins and knights fought the undead outside the city. The battle raged for days, until the Druid Norinth appeared at the head of his forces, protected by a barrier of pure evil. Calling forth a swarm of deadly drones, he charged at the city, but was suddenly blasted back by a beam of light. From the gates of NorthKeep, a mage stepped forward. In a booming voice, he announced,"Evil shall not corrupt this world, I may not be able to kill you, but I will die trying!"
With those words, the mage Ewin unleashed a magical assualt never seen by anyone before. Norinth countered blow after blow, but was losing, and losing fast. In a desperate attempt, he sent his general Kalados in to try to assassinate this new threat, along with his pet Ssilx, and evil dragon of great bloodthirst. Seeing the danger to their protector, the defenders of NorthKeep rallied out onto the fields. Combining their powers, they let loose a great Flame of Fire upon the evil forces.
When the smoke cleared, they found Norinth had magically teleported himself, and his generals away from the battlefield. The evil had fled, good had prevailed. The price was heavy however. In defeating Norinth, Ewin and his allies had burnt half of the plains into a dismal waste, where fire twisted creatures roamed, looking for someone, or something, to put them out of their misery.
That wasnt always the case in all the battles however. Memorable battles in places like Pern Valley were fought where evil dominated, and soon overran the place.
But, soon, balance was restored. The lands were still in a constant conflict, good forces against evil, but no more great battles were fought, no more major victories for either side have been won.
But there is no end to the age old story. Plots are being formed every day, adventurers trying their skills against the evil, and the evil against the good. Perhaps good will once again embrace the entire land, healing the scars, or maybe evil will succeed in destroying everything. Only time will tell."
"wow I never new that. What do we do now"wow when you look at some peoples lives yours dosnt seem so bad.
Well we will have to go get you so acceseries
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Re: sneek peak at the NM book
« Reply #1 on: 03/28/03 at 02:28:31 » |
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Your introduction makes it sound like these were teenage kids late for school.
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Is zephie supposed to be a trailerpark prostitute here? Using hot to describe someone in a storyline probably isn't suitable and the last time I checked she did not have blonde hair. 
Quote:"well if you must know. Your Dad the one that died 3 years ago never died. He was Sent here for resons we dont know, but now we do. He is to portal opener. That mist you saw was the portal. We brought you here because only you can kill your dad." She explanes
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What relevance does his 'dad' have on any of mist?
Quote:| "well yes.If you dont are worlds will cross paths""If they do are monsters will inviade your wirld."she said. |
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Is this the Mario Brothers movie?
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Chris asks a simple question here and is given a long storyline which does not correspond with the story your leading here. None of it actually tells chris how to kill his father.
And why is he getting accessories? Is he preparing for battle? Explain!
There are about a million other errors, but I want to give the rest of the nightmist community a chance to criticize.
Sorry for the harshness, but if it is going to represent the Nightmist Community then it should be top quality.
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Re: sneek peak at the NM book
« Reply #2 on: 03/28/03 at 02:39:22 » |
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Well i still need to elaberate
but hows this
A nice looking girl with black hair, and robes walks by Chris and turns her head i estonishment to how he has gotin there
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« Reply #3 on: 03/28/03 at 02:57:46 » |
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There is one thing that stands out more to me than anything else, please use your spell checker. It is very hard for me to want to read through such a long post with so many typos and spelling mistakes. Just copy and paste it into word, spell check it, then you are A Ok.
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« Reply #4 on: 03/28/03 at 03:11:58 » |
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I hope to see what you have in store for us.
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« Reply #5 on: 03/28/03 at 05:58:40 » |
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on 03/28/03 at 01:48:37, lifeless wrote:
Your Dad the one that died 3 years ago never died.
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Maybe it's just me but the way that's worded makes it sound like he has more than one dad.
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« Reply #6 on: 03/28/03 at 12:53:39 » |
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Nice, I'm in the story too! 
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« Reply #7 on: 03/28/03 at 16:11:13 » |
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on 03/28/03 at 12:53:39, Norinth wrote:| Nice, I'm in the story too! |
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heh....uhh yeh....that part was taken from the main page of nightmist. just so ya know(if you didnt already).
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« Reply #8 on: 03/28/03 at 16:11:53 » |
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There wasn't enough detail in some parts, and most of that was taken from the nightmist home page, I just thought i'd mention that in case you were like Jurian, and tried to take credit for something someone else did.
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« Reply #9 on: 03/28/03 at 19:33:35 » |
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I read the first part, and you lost me, I stoped and making this post now.. Needs to be more interesting... Its boring..
And use spell checker..
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« Reply #10 on: 03/28/03 at 20:27:16 » |
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on 03/28/03 at 05:58:40, Rattlesnake wrote:
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Ah I missed that. Heavily amusing.
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« Reply #11 on: 03/29/03 at 00:13:19 » |
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you might wanna put it through a spellchecker before intoducing it to the community. i would also like to read more mature descriptions, or just more descriptions in general.
Edit: you also might wanna use a thesourus (sp?). it gets boring reading the same words/phrases repeatedly, like Chris says.
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Re: sneek peak at the NM book
« Reply #12 on: 04/01/03 at 01:41:05 » |
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iTS WEIRD I CANT FIND SPELLCHECKER IN WORD IT WAS THERE AND NOW ITS NOT.,,,,,......
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« Reply #13 on: 04/01/03 at 03:24:26 » |
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I applaud your efforts and aspirations, but perhaps you should consider painting? Something that doesn't use words?
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« Reply #14 on: 04/05/03 at 00:08:34 » |
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What the F uck is that? Is it some sick example of Dr. Suess? Please don't quit your day job bud... just a word of advice. Also on another note, anyone who has the time to write a book on Nightmist has no life. Also on another note anyone that plays this game more than a hour a day has no life. Put two and two together none of the sysops have life, especially JLH ... guess I am raving.. guys yall need a life.. umm now introducing "The opposite Sex!" or "BEER" but yall losers would probably end up having sex and drinking beer while playing nightmist!
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« Reply #15 on: 04/05/03 at 15:10:23 » |
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hmmm.....interesting idea.....ive done the beer.....but sex, beer, and nm?.... hmmmm.....now youre just givin me ideas.
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« Reply #16 on: 04/06/03 at 02:17:44 » |
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So life revolves around drinking beer and having sex, interesting idea.
"Also on another note"
You have the time to come insult us, but won't your ever important social life suffer from the time taken to write up that post? I mean, you could be vomiting into a toilet.
"Also on another note"
I might try the beer, sex and nightmist. Grab the extension cord Sera, lets have some fun.
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« Reply #17 on: 04/06/03 at 02:27:16 » |
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*grins at Odin and grabs the extention cord*
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« Reply #18 on: 04/07/03 at 01:45:25 » |
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Sex, Tick
Beer, Tick
Nightmist, Tick
Now lets see... Sex, yes, good fun, great past time. Takes place at night, mornings, and is scattered therafter. Leaving ample time for Nightmist
Beer, well, it's good fun now and then, but to be frank, I'd say you'd have to be a dropkick to use beer as an example of leading a fun healthy life. Right there you image became a striking resemblance of that fat comic shop owner out of the simpsons.
As for your ideal lifestyle goes, we should all be wallowing in ones own self pity sucking down Fosters, and porking like your mother and the local trolly pusher just to get knocked up, so we can get payments from the government.
Now as far as us all having no life goes, I have noticed that many, like my self, are also working. 10 hours a day, five days a week. 7 hours inbetween my start and finish time, I take to sleep. Whilst doing this, a reasonable social life is maintained, and females, and the aquisitoin of, has never posed any difficulty. I would also be so bold as to say, that whilst not the same schedule as I, the majority of the older Nightmist community also live an existence as bountiful as this.
If this does not account for having a life, please, tell me, and the rest of the Nightmist community, as to how to better this lowly case of sober obscurity. I believe your post simply indicates what a lowlife scumbag you are, who has nothing in life other than hard liqour and hookers.
As for your remarks on JLH and the such, if I were in any position of authority, I would instantly ban all your crits, in fact, delete your account, and make sure that you never show your ugly dog's wrinkled @$$hole with peeling skin look alike low life face on Nightmist or the Forums ever again.
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Re: sneek peak at the NM book
« Reply #19 on: 04/10/03 at 04:48:05 » |
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Low life as you may call me, but never such as I am. I work 6 days a week 40-50 hours a week. I bring home the bread and the butter, I just can't see how anyone can sit in front of their computer and drool over a game? Maybe is just me. As for the beer it was just an alternative to this game.. and also for JLH to ban my crits... hmm go for it.. I don't have any crits on this game... as for my forum account go for it as well... it would just lead me to not post anything in this forum, bleh I have better things to do...
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